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Now that you have completed the exercise, take a look at how Erla structured the introduction to her essay.
| 4 – Over the last few decades there has been a significant growth in tourism world-wide because of globalisation, which has made it easier to travel. | We start with a statement about the growth of tourism worldwide. |
| 1 – As part of human experience, travellers are seeking more exotic places, and Iceland has become a popular destination, increasing in popularity in the last decade. | Then a move from the general to the specific – a focus on tourism in Iceland. |
| 8 – After facing a deep and harmful financial crisis in 2008, tourism has become an important industry for Iceland. | The idea of tourism as an economic activity is introduced. |
| 3 – This shift in arrivals to Iceland has led to increased economic growth. Factors which affect this growth include type of facility, tourist spending and investment. | |
| 6 – According to Ólafsdottir (2013) the annual number of tourists has doubled since the year 2000 with annual growth of 7.3%. | Statistics (and their sources) are added to provide evidence of this increase in economic activity, Firstly statistics about past performance… |
| 5 – From 2012, the number of foreign visitors is expected to increase from 670,000 to 1,500,000 before 2023. (The Boston Consulting Group, 2013). | … and then predictions about future growth. |
| 7 – Although there are some problems when tourism grows too quickly, namely weak governance and environmental damage, the benefits for the economy are significant and can open up a variety of opportunities for the country. | While the economic benefits of increased numbers of tourists are obvious, this sentence mentions some negative impact, suggesting that the essay will provide a balanced argument. |
| 2 – The aim of this essay is to consider the economic impact of tourism in Iceland and discuss whether it is essential for the economy. | Finally, the introduction ends with an overview of the structure of the essay, linking the introduction with the rest of the essay. |
So how did the sentence sequence(s) you constructed in the previous Step compare?
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