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Now that you’ve completed the exercise in the previous Step, let’s look at how Erla structured the conclusion to her essay.
| 3 – In summary, Iceland has been growing significantly as a destination for tourism in the last years, and this project has clearly demonstrated the major economic contribution this makes, and thus the essential nature of tourism for the Icelandic economy | This is a summary of the main points of the essay - words like “significant”, “major” and “essential” reveal the writers viewpoint. |
| 4 – This growth is expected to continue in the future which will create jobs and require further investment, both in facilities and infrastructure. | Here we have future predictions. |
| 2 – However, this growth brings a number of urgent challenges and it should be a priority for the government to reform the governance of this industry with authority and a clear strategy, to ensure opportunities continue. | The potential problems mentioned in the introduction are re-stated here, with recommendations for government. |
| 1- It is also essential that tourism is distributed all around the country, and to emphasise balance in distribution of visitors over the year for better utilisation of resources. | |
| 5 – In addition, it is fundamental to calculate and control the key measurements on a regular basis, otherwise tourism might not be sustainable long term, causing a negative impact on the country with unforeseeable consequences | The essay ends with a statement of the implications of not following the recommendations made. |
So how did the sentence sequence(s) you constructed in the previous Step compare?
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