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there is an "and" and a "had" missing in your first sentence.
Have a look at this alternative, please;
"In 1990, both urban and rural populations had less access to improved water sources compared to 2010. There has been a significant increase for both areas."
Then you say "urban populations have had steady increase". You can actually...
have a look at this alternative way of describing the bar chart:
Between 1990 and 2010 the number of people in urban areas with access to improved water resources has increased by 1.2 billion.
See also the title of the bar chart, please. The access in urban ares did no remain constant!
The same is true for rural areas. So, here you are...
You say " Over the period of 1990", but 1990 is a fixed point in time. It is not a period of time.
You could say "Between 1990 and 2010 the access to improved water sources in both urban and rural areas has improved. In comparison, the improvement in urban areas has been more significant than in rural areas."
Look at this way of continuing...
a very good attempt. Have a look at this alternative:
In 1990 over 2 million people in urban areas enjoyed access to improved water resources (or: benefited from access to improved water resources. By 2010 this number rose to over 3 million. At the same time the number of people in urban areas with access to unimproved water sources rose...
A good start.
Have a look at this alternative, please:
Among both, urban and rural populations, the access to improved drinking water sources has increased between 1990 and 2010.
I particularly like your attempt at using a construction starting with "while". Look at this way of saying it, please.
While the access to unimproved sources of...
Good work, Roy.
You write: "The data indicates increased proportions of global populations benefiting from improved water sources over the period: urban by 1.2 billion, rural by approximately 850 million."
Proportions are usually expressed in percentages, not in figures.
instead of saying
"From 2,142 to 3,343 million people, have the opportunity to improve sources in only 10 years".
You could say:
The number of people in urban areas with access to improved drinking water has increased from 2,142 to 3,343 billion between 1990 and 2010.
the number of people in urban areas with access to unimproved water sources has, in fact, increased between 1990 and 2010 (109 -130).
You are right though: if we compare the relationship between the number of people with access to an improved water source in urban areas and the number of people with access to an unimproved water source in...
you could also start your description like this:
This bar chart shows two types of population, urban and rural, and their access to drinking water, improved and unimproved sources, between 1990 and 2010.
You could finish your paragraph like this:
On the other hand (good expression!), the access to unimproved water sources in rural areas...
Hi Rimamtanung ( I hope I got your first name right),
If you compare the figures for access to an unimproved water source among urban dwellers, you will see that there has, in fact been, an increase between 1990 and 2010 (109-130).
But you are right: overall the positive trend in terms of access to an improved water source among urban dwellers outweighs...
you follow the example of the video recording very well.
Double check this sentence, please:
In 2010 there were 3,343 billion people in the urban population who had access to improved drinking water source more than 1990 where there were 2,143 billion people who had access to improved drinking water source.
It is better to start a new...
check again. The bar chart shows a positive trend in terms of increased access to an improved drinking water resource in both urban and rural areas, doesn't it?
Look at and compare the dark blue parts of t he bar for 1990 and 2010 with each each other for both "Urban" and "Rural".
You are right though: At the same time, the number of people...
check again, please: Is the increase of (or: in) the number of people in rural areas with access to improved drinking water really comparable to the increase of (or: in) the number of people in urban areas. In your post you write "comparably similar".
I like your speculative explanation for the fact that there has been an increase in access to...
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